A private blog for Victor Navone's "Advanced Animation Critique" class at the Animation Collaborative, Spring 2016 session.
Hi Jenny, looks like you're off to a good start. I think your camera's focal length may be too wide. Try something narrower like 35 for a more natural feeling. Adding in the drawings as image planes will help as well. As you develop your expressions further, pay close attention to the quality of the lines and how they relate to each other. For example, the curve of the upper screen left lid in the first pose, and how it relates to the line of the brow. Or in the second pose, notice how complex your upper lid shapes are compared to the drawing. Keep working, and I'll see you Wednesday!
Thanks for the notes Victor! I appreciate the detail about line relations; complex with simple. Could you discuss that more in class?